Tuesday 2 July 2019

spider

I saw a spider 

  Adjective I saw a huge white tail

When Last week I saw a huge white tail spider on my roof.

Where Last week I saw a huge white tail spider on my roof at home.

  How Last week I looked up and saw a huge white tail spider on my roof at home. 

Why Last week I looked up and saw a huge white tail spider on my roof at home it fell on me and I got stung.
              
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2 comments:

  1. Anonymous30 July 2019 at 14:37

    Dear Jane,
    you added an adjective to your writing what makes it interesting.
    Your writing is very good that stung must of hurt.
    You could add more exciting words next time.
    From Calais

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  2. Anonymous20 August 2019 at 14:40

    Next time you can kinda make sense because how do you get stung by a spider? i really hate spiders. And i really like how you made the words rainbow well some of them.

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